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Nicely designed, easy to navigate site(with clear summaries of work/roles), filled with good work and a chill reel that keeps your attention end to end.

Well done sir!

Edited by oeuf

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If I may say so, your intro is really lovely. It's personalized, stylish, and well-made, and I'm immediately sold that you have solid design sensibilities, a filmic underpinning to your work, good taste and the chops to execute it. But then you inexplicably follow it with something that breaks that expectation with this kind of messy, heavily compressed, harshly-colored design mosh that's reminiscent of commercial work that was trendy quite a few years ago now. Maybe that's because it's actually older work, and older work is in no way unwelcome, but this work doesn't hold up to the expectation set up by your intro. You're telling us we're about to see something artful, and then you're hitting us with paint splat mattes from '05. There's a momentum of inspiration built by your intro, so maybe there's a way to keep that momentum going instead of blasting right into the NBA 2K splat matte fiesta. I feel like I got my feet massaged in an art gallery and then someone dropped a stack of jpegged hip hop flyers on my head. :D

 

I also feel like your pacing is generally pretty good, and there's real intention behind your editing, like in the Land of Vree cuts and the Nick Jr. spot. And that kind of thing really brings this piece alive. Although there are a couple of spots where you're letting some cuts hang out and overstay their welcome, like the Deus Ex title, which has an interesting and active build, but is finished showing us anything about two seconds before you move on. And I think that comic book punch kid is timed out really well to the audio, but it's at a point in the track where it has no energy to back it up. The audio itself is a bit underwhelming for the pace at which you've decided to cut, which makes the piece a little dischordant, but I think the intentionality and playfulness of your editing makes it work in most cases. I will say, though, that either because of vimeo's poor audio sync during playback, or the timing of your cuts, most of the cuts are a frame or two early so you're not getting the full benefit of audio and visual dancing together. They're dancing real sloppy. You might want to first check your own render to see if it's any different on your site.

 

Lastly, does the CBS spot feel like it's what you want to go out on? I would assume you have a bucket of things to choose from after 8 years, whereas something like the bendy "argument" text doesn't seem as sophisticated as you're capable of, and that's the taste you're leaving on our mouths when this is all over. Sure we get a little after dinner mint with a throwback to your intro, but it's still there, lingering.

 

This is a pretty good presentation, overall. Site looks great too, cuts through unnecessary bullshit, and knows what's important. I'm citing the downsides, for the sake of betterment, but you should feel pretty good about it, and I imagine you do!

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Personally, I didn't find the basketball stuff quite so awful, and I barely noticed that it was splats for mattes. Plexus light trails struck me as a more cliched. Maybe my taste is off the mark, but a second opinion can be helpful so thought I'd mention it.

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Thanks for the thoughtful feedback Binky, you've given me a lot to think about.

I have to say your feedback is probably the biggest reason why I still come back to this site after all these years.

 

I'm definitely going to revisit the edit and tighten things up a bit. I'll see what I have to replace the NBA shot, and the last section of the CBS spot as well.

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